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1) lacks further elaboration later on in the text. Can # The reference to theocracy should be fixed by extending removed as irrelevant to the About Civil Rights -section.pirate agenda
-# "When a government..., that is theocracy." removed
1) # incoherent, in relation to the prior text2) written in a tone of panic====Korjausehdotus====# - Scrapped ===About Civil Rights and Liberties, § 1===* "For understanding the context the two last points we can say that ... opinion or any other personal or social condition or circumstance."
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==Muutosehdotukset==
===Preamble, 1 §===
* "When a government does not represent the people, but a certain subclass, that is not democracy, that is aristocracy. When a government does not listen to facts, but listens to beliefs, that is not democracy, that is theocracy. When a government does not listen to the people, or to the rule of law, that is not democracy, that is dictatorship. We believe that democracy is the ideal, and it is to this end that we do aspire and work. "
====Kommentti====
====Korjausehdotus====
===Preamble, 2 §===
* "When corruption and ignorance run through the streets of our cities, having left common sense and forethought for dead, we must act, or be trampled."
====Kommentit====
====Kommentit====
# "For understanding the context...." Should be removed? That's just usual political correctness, doesn't really say anything or add anything to the manifesto.
====Korjausehdotus====
# -Remove.
===About Restrictions of Ideas and Information : About Author's Rights===
* Today, the balance is biased, but not towards authors, but towards publishers who have alienated author's rights, and the bias grows without control and with the connivence of authorities; balance has to be reinstated, not only to restore citizens their rights regarding culture, but to also restore authors theirs preventing them to be alienated anymore.
====Kommentit====
# "Today the balance is biased ...who have alianted author's rights" <- The fact is, copyright is also biased towards authors
# "but to also restore authors..." <- Dubious. Should be clarified, or the meaning of the statement may not be clear to everyone. E.g. how authors are alienated because of copyright?
====Korjausehdotus====
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==Ensimmäinen vedos==
[[:Kuva:PirateManifestoFirstDraft_FI-quicktransl.pdf|PDF-versio]]
<pre>Pikakäännös, versio 07.09.2008 23:10 Anton Tamminen</pre>
===Johdanto===
Saavuttamalla tavoitteemme mahdollistamme kansalaisten ilmaista itseään näissä kiistellyissä asioissa ja täten edistämme yhteisymmärryksen saavuttamista; samalla pohjustaen parlamentaarisuuden todellista moninaisuutta, sillä tiedon portin avaaminen kansalaisille antaa heille mahdollisuuden valita se kansan ääni joka parhaiten ajaa heidän asiaansa – . me olemme yksi niistä äänistä. Tämän takia, on liikkeemme tukeminen jokaiselle kansalaiselle paras tapa saavuttaa myös ne tavoitteet jotka ovat keskeisten tavoitteidemme ulkopuolella.
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